Revision Instructions

English 10: Research Paper Revision

Follow these instructions. After you have completed a step, put a check next to it.

1. Log on to your computer and open your rough draft.
2. Title it: Rough Draft #1
3. Highlight the following sentences (see instructions below):
   a. Thesis statement in the introduction
   b. The topic sentence of each body paragraph
   c. Restated thesis statement in the conclusion
4. Print the rough draft
5. Follow instructions on the “Peer Revision Handout” (Identify off-topic details and awkward sounding sentences.) (If your paper is too long, ask your partner to identify wordiness that you can later revise.)
6. After completing handout #2, make necessary revisions to your rough draft. (Revise off-topic details so they support the topic sentence. Revise the thesis statement so it conveys the full idea of your paper. Revise awkward sounding sentences.)
7. Search the document for first or second person point of view. (See instructions below.)
8. Re-title it: Rough Draft #2
9. Save as: Rough Draft #2
10. Print.
11. On the printed copy, revise any uses of first and second-person point of view.
12. Make changes to your Word document. Instead of writing “If you have diabetes, you should lower your sugar intake” write “Diabetics have to lower their sugar intake” or “When someone is diagnosed with diabetes, he must lower his sugar intake.”
13. Re-title it: Rough Draft #3
14. Save as: Rough Draft #3
15. Next class, you will edit Rough Draft #3.

Using "find" to search for first and second-person points of view.