Peer Revision Handout

English 10: Peer Revision

• First, if you did not do this on your Word document, highlight the thesis statement in the introduction, the topic sentence of each body paragraph, and the restated thesis statement in the conclusion.
• Next, copy those sentences onto the lines below.
• Now, trade papers with a partner and answer lettered questions about your partner’s paper.
• Partner: You will read and help revise the paper. You are looking for content-level errors (not spelling or punctuation). Your job is to
  **identify paragraph details that are off topic.
  **analyze and assess the thesis statement.
  **look for and identify awkward sounding sentences (awk)
• If your paper has 5 paragraphs, do #1-4 and 7 below. For a 6 paragraph paper, do #1-5 and 7.
  

1. Introduction and Thesis Statement. Copy the thesis statement:
   a. Does the thesis statement encompass main ideas of each body paragraph? (Answer this question after you have read the topic sentences of each body paragraph.)
   b. Is the thesis statement too vague?
   c. Is the thesis statement too specific?
   d. What changes can the writer make?
   e. Additional comments:
   
2. Topic sentence of body paragraph 1. Copy it here:
   a. Does each sentence in the paragraph help support this topic?
   b. Draw a line under sentences that don’t help support the topic.
   c. The writer should revise or delete these underlined sentences.
   d. Additional comments:
   
3. Topic sentence of body paragraph 2. Copy it here:
   a. Does each sentence in the paragraph help support this topic?
   b. Draw a line under sentences that don’t help support the topic.
   c. The writer should revise or delete these underlined sentences.
   d. Additional comments:
   
4. Topic sentence of body paragraph 3. Copy it here:
   a. Does each sentence in the paragraph help support this topic?
   b. Draw a line under sentences that don’t help support the topic.
   c. The writer should revise or delete these underlined sentences.
   d. Additional comments:
   
5. Topic sentence of body paragraph 4. Copy it here:
   a. Does each sentence in the paragraph help support this topic?
   b. Draw a line under sentences that don’t help support the topic.
   c. The writer should revise or delete these underlined sentences.
   d. Additional comments:
   
6. Topic sentence of body paragraph 5. Copy it here:
   a. Does each sentence in the paragraph help support this topic?
   b. Draw a line under sentences that don’t help support the topic.
   c. The writer should revise or delete these underlined sentences.
   d. Additional comments:
   
7. Conclusion’s restated thesis statement. Copy it here:
   a. Is it adequately restated?
   b. If the thesis statement in the introduction was too vague or specific and needs revising, this restated thesis needs revising, too. The writer must address this.
   c. Additional comments: